Comments of chapter undefined of Ranker's Quest
Ranker's Quest
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Thanks for the chapter :) This chapter was alot better than the previous two. I knew who was talking, and it wasnt as rushed as the first chapter. The bad thing about the chapter... 'info dumping'. Next time you write a story you have to have this in your mind. Info dumping is when a very large amount of information is supplied at once. Normally info dumping occurs in the narrative, but sometimes in dialogue too. In your case, its in your dialogue. Let me give you an example on how you should deal with info. Read 'Ranker's Return'. You will notice that the info you get is stretched out over a longer period. Meaning the readers will get a chance to absorb the info so it won't get confusing. You have too much dialogue explaining everything at once. Try stretching it out more next time. The readers don't need all that info in the third chapter. Either way it's a big step up from the first one.
well, it's unfortunate TT and I also signed a contract with this title that means I have to go on and improve more with this story. that's why I really appreciate your comment. once again, thanks a lot [img=update]
L0rdGr1m_:You cant fix it, its already too late. But next time you write a story, just keep in mind that the readers will get easily confused if you give too much info in one place. I have been guilty of doing the same myself. But you learn the more you write. And when you finished with this one, I can guarantee the next story will be so much better. And you don't have to go back and rewrite anything, just keep them as if.
