ANILAX
Thanks for your review it's my fast writing so I don't really have any experience . You can say this story as a test run . I wanna make my writing skills better from this story and really thanks again for everything you said I can take everything that you said into account next time I write. and yeah no emojis I thought it was bad idea too .
Here is my review of the series. To be completely frank, its not that good. Im not gonna go into the bad grammar because it is probably just a language barrier but even not taking that into account it isnt that great. The story is generic and every character isnt even a character. They feel like lifeless corpses that sometimes talk. Yota has no character development throughout the entire series and neither does any other characters. Thats just bad writing not a language barrier. And the story itself isnt that great. Its not horrible but not good. Im guessing that the language barrier makes it hard to convey a story but the storyline itself isnt good. Its generic but sometimes generic feels nice no its not horrible. Also, never, never never never use emojis in a story. It doesnt look good. The dialouge also feels very unnatural but I can just say that is the language barrier. Also I wouldnt use “she said” or “he said” in a story too much. Once you have an understanding of which person is saying what you dont need to say that each time. Thats my review. I would talk more but dont have the expertise. overall I give the story a 3/5.