AnWan
Hey bro just a ****** story suggestion.dont go on a classic boring route of villan boy,villan brother,villan father,......,villan ultimate ancestor added with a lot of face smacking.there are sh*t load of novels like that out there and your novel wont have a bright future if you follow the same path
If you can get past the typos, the poor grammar and sentence structure, and the hanging sentences ( ones that end without warning) the story is interesting. However I am enjoying the comments more than the story. I would suggest getting an editor that speakes native English, either from England or North America. But that is just my two cents. Carry on author.