Dlchelwani
The plot is great but i feel like flying coz the development is too fast. Some advice, write it in more detail about the feeling, the scenery and every event that happened. Example, when she was hit, write where is the place that hit, how much pain it was, try to describe it like "feel hit by a truck" etc... Then make her think of the word 'Help' ...make her wish someone will help her.. But then again since she didn't have anyone, describe her feeling at that time... How lonely and despair she feel about it... See you can write a lot about this event.. Don't rush ur writing... We can wait š another one, avoid being exaggerate when describe how rich or powerful the ml is. Finding the best doctor from overseas... Tsk tsk... Her injuries is not that lethal...