Les01
You lecture about piracy as you flaunt a book riddled with spelling and grammatical errors and have the nerve to sell it for 5 tines the price of a properly done novel. Lower your prices to reflect the miniscule content of each chapter we pay for or make proper chapters and, for God's sake, FIX THE ERRORS. This story, other than all the wasted space of repeating content and preaching about piracy (and the above mentioned errors and pricing) is well thought out with fresh new faces to add to my fantasy collection. But stop preaching about piracy while robbing your readers blind in the process.
Leon better add his name to the list of those needing to be punished. He was under the same spell and would still be if not for Alicia. Even though I think she should have done more. her presence was needed to even recognize that something was wrong and measures needed to be taken to save the men. I need Alicia to work harder to become an equal to Leon. She can't always wait to be saved, she has to have the courage and wisdom to make decisions and execute strategies in all situations.