thisworldofmine1
Honestly, this story is a bit too fast paced... the characters are not being flushed out properly and now you’re having them train in weapons combat? They are only 6-12 respectively at this point in age, also it’s a bit ridiculous that the names keep changing in different POVs. Seriously just stick to one name. Lots of work needs to be done story wise and world building wise. The mother and father became irrelevant and the protagonist hasn’t even tried to change the future especially with the accident that happened to the mother. Highly disappointed so far. I don’t mean to be a Debbie downer but my points are accurate.