Comments of chapter undefined of Photograph Mistake [BL]
Photograph Mistake [BL]
PrincessMelodi
Chapter comments7
Maybe you'll want this and maybe you won't but here's just a few thoughts for ya so you can maybe increase the quality. My first nitpick is maybe increasing the details in your novel? If you're looking to make a BL you don't have to describe the girl but maybe describe the male MC more than petite with slightly long black hair. How long, what is his face like etc. Just adding a few more details can make a scene a little more lively. Maybe my second nitpick is that you use too many commas. Other than minor grammar issues that can be chalked up to typos. [IE: He was made into wearing] [and those things still did indeed embarrassed him] Could be [He was forced into wearing] [those things were still embarrassing] Just my two cents. Maybe you didn't wanna see it but I think a good amount of constructive criticism is always nice. :) Keep up the good work?
