Exlor
I feel like the correct solution to the issue of overpenetration with the narrow spear is to make it a trident, which I suppose also fits the name in a Judeo-Christian social consciousness. In other news this is the first story for which I’ve felt compelled to comment. Excellent work. In terms of science fiction, you have great chops. I find just he narrative compelling, but I will say that outside of the webnovel format, you would benefit from a more streamlined narrative. The conflict so far has been palpable internal anxiety and formulaic competition-based. Again, in this format, you wouldn’t need to break out of that to compel your audience, but you clearly have the mind and skills to write for a larger audience and I’d love to see your books in stores. All things being equal, you’re several weight classes above any other author I’ve read in my descent into light novel addiction. Thank you for the story.