Sorahana
Hope that Lin Yuan is really a nice girl. And please notice me, author-san. The words 'decided and played' in this sentence: "The girl decided played along as she did not feel any hint of hostility from Lin Yuan." is both on the past tense. It should be "The girl decided to play along as......." I think. It just doesn't sound nice. From concerned citizen. 😘
The stories concept is splendid but the way you put together words, setting, Characters seems amiss, For example some male characters, some times you use 'her' instead of 'him' and the stories speed is unstable, It goes fast and slow, Skips important details and then slows down on the unimportant ones